Monday, April 25, 2016

Story Excerpt: Bringing the Plants In

I love writing the future, but it's too hard because I've never seen it. I love writing complicated, realistic characters; but they come out flat and formulaic if I've never met them.

So, once upon a time, I started a story. It's set in the future--but not too far out. Just a generation or so. The main character, Kiera, is the same age as me with similar hopes, dreams, and fears. She has a very ordinary life--just a little more future-y than yours or mine. So I've been working on the story (7k words, so far); but I still have a bit of a love/hate relationship with it.

Here's the first scene...

The water came out of the spigot in a trickle that slowly filled the watering can. Remembering the old rule about watching a pot boil, the young woman rose to her feet and dusted the dirt off her denim skirt. It was obviously going to be a while so she should find something else to do while she waited for the watering can to fill with filtered water. Giving the trickling spigot one last glance, she left the porch to inspect her garden.
            Two large raised beds on wheels sat in the center of the lawn soaking up the afternoon sun. Small patches of lettuce, salsa greens, and tomatoes filled one bed while the other held her root vegetables and as many flowers as she had found room to squeeze in. Running her fingers gently through the soft, cool earth, she began to pull the tiny weeds that had come up during the day to make room for her vegetables to grow. One of her tomato plants had started a tiny green bud that she smiled in anticipation over. A few of the flowers had wilted, and she plucked their heads to make room for others to grow.
            Something made her remember the watering can, and she hurried over to turn off the spigot before the water overflowed. Lifting the much heavier can, she carried it across the yard to her garden and gave her plants their evening drink. She smiled when she was done, satisfied that all was well and wiped her muddy hands on her oversized sweatshirt.
            The screen door opened and a voice called out, “Kiera, there’s rain forecast for tonight. Do you need any help taking them in?”
            Kiera looking up to see her mom standing barefoot on the patio, and the screen door open behind her. “Sure, thanks for telling me.”
            Mom joined her on the lawn and together they rolled the raised beds onto the patio. Putting her watering can down next to the spigot for the next day, Kiera pulled the waterproof shades that covered all sides of the porch down and made sure they were securely hooked in place. She didn’t want to risk letting her vegetables get rained on. She’d have to start all over again if that happened.
            Following Mom into the house, she remembered to ask, “Hey, is Thorne able to come tonight?”
            “Pastor Silas has offered to lead the Bible study this time, so yes he is coming,” Mom said, rinsing her hands in the kitchen sink. “I’m so glad that he’s able to get the time off. We only see him during church now.”
            Kiera laughed. “Yeah, and that’s just from our pew. Let me know if you need any help with dinner.”
            “All right, I’ll tell you. Just as soon as I know what it is.”
Mom began to rummage through the refrigerator talking aloud to herself in an unintelligible murmur of different food all run together. Kiera smiled to herself and sat down in front of the computer. Opening the weather app, she saw that sure enough a storm front was coming towards their town; and she was glad they had brought the vegetables in when she noticed that the radiation levels were extra high.
“Really high radiation, Mom,” she mentioned aloud.
“Oh dear,” Mom replied with her head half in the in the refrigerator. “I guess it will all be indoors tonight then. No barbecue, so I’ll have to think of something else.”
She returned to her murmuring, and Kiera turned back to the computer. Since she was already on, she might as well check the other apps. Shifting that app to the side, she opened her journaling one to make sure no one was talking to her there. Nothing. No mail either. She scrolled through the old messages just to make sure she had replied to them all. Seconds later she spun around in her chair and slapped her palm to her forehead.
“What’s the matter, dear?” Mom asked, standing up with a head of lettuce in one hand and a half-empty jar of tomato sauce in the other.
“I totally forgot that since it’s Bible study night, Jade will be coming. Do you think Thorne will mind sharing his evening? It’s probably too late to cancel, and I’m not sure what else Brennan would do. It’s not easy to get a babysitter,” she thought aloud with a pucker in her forehead.
“Of course he won’t mind in the least,” Mom assured her. “Your brother loves that little girl like you wouldn’t believe.”
Kiera grinned. “Do we have enough food for that?”
“The three-year-old is on hunger strike, and she asks if we’ll have enough food,” Mom told the refrigerator and shook her head.
Now Kiera really laughed. “You’re right. I’m being silly. Sorry about that.”
“No problem. Just come wash this lettuce while I roll these meatballs, and we’ll say no more,” Mom said with a teasing smile.
Her daughter stood up from the computer and took off her sweatshirt. Washing her hands in the kitchen sink, she began to rinse the lettuce. It would be a slow job since the kitchen’s filter wasn’t much faster than the outdoor spigot. Oh, well. Thorne wouldn’t be coming for another hour at least. 


So, there you are! That's a current story project.
What do you think? Does it sound interesting?

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